Wow, it was quick. Few days ago I've checked all the scraps, journals and arts, and today there are 3 parts to read and one more comming.
Thank you in advance!

I will chek it in upcomming days and comment

Thank you! I have to admit I half of the story was around for a couple of month, but I wrote the other half in the last days. Depends of the feedback I will decide how much effort I will put in it in the future. The benefit from storys isn't much.

As a person who managed to publish (or better say print) two books in 2020, I agree, this is hobby but not something you can benefit from. Emotions - yes, sure. Money...

Well, there are ~700 publishers in Russia and only one found my novels quite good. But I founded printing (100 copies of each novel) and distribute it on my own across my readers. There is no money profit, I have return of investment about 30% so far, and can do up to 50% (jjst because I used half of it as a gifts to my friends) but hey, emotions worth it.

Don't know how it is going with books industry in other countries, my English translation is not really good and only two persons tried to read it)) but common tendency is the same - it is better to write for yourself and several people around you, and post writings somewhere. If you pleased yourself - good. If someone close to you liked the story - great, these people and their feedback will drive you throug the process. If you gain some attention from strangers in the web - excellent!

Maybe it sound not really well, but it helps me to keep going. Just remind myself that I do a story which is important, not something to please random guys with their kinks and washed brains :)

Thanks for your comment! I think for a lot writers self-publishing with e-books is the future. It works. Printing is way to expensive and I also think people are more motivated to read a few lines during a break on their mobile devices than grab a hard copy. Of course, if you have a well written book, they read it too and give it away to friends is a nice idea for a gift.
Writing in your mother language goes way better and in a lot of cases. Some languages can transport the meaning way better. For example, the german language gives you a lot of more option for detail descriptions than english. Of course, if my english skills would be better I can do it this way to, but the effort is too much. I'm not making money out of it. Same goes with russian language as far as I know. The russian language is also advanced and has a lot of single words that explains a specific thing without using a whole line of text.
However, self pusblishing is no option. The audience is to small. If I look around and see all the well written fanfiction, my conclusion is, stick with your work and do the writing for just a gimmick or to support your characters. It's kind of fun too and gives you a dose of escapism.
I think drawing short comics would be effective to reach a bigger audience, but thats also a big pile of work.

I already had FB2 versions (with Authors.today it is easy) and you are right, now I prefer e-books and my PocketBook basic saved me lot of space.
Also places like wattpad where you can publish your story bit by bit are quite popular these days (also it backfires with no interest to the actually written things - folks there read only something that you are writing at the moment, and there are only specific genres are popular at the moment. It did not work for me)

I have a lot of illustrations, many of them are in colour, so the printed book was cheapier than all the commissions X) You might already saw them in my gallery. And I wanted to create something that not only feels nice when reading, but looks nice as well.

Understand your point with native languages - I thought the same unless red J.R.R.Tolkien, Ray Brudbarry and Jeff VanderMeer - sometimes English have even more words to describe bad weather, cozy places and sometimes nature. And some emotions and feelings does not exist in English, so I had to adapt.
One Day I'll read Hyperion in English - hope original is as poetic as Russian translation.

Okay, enough offtopic from me, I guess. You are waiting for feedbacks on your writings))
Dose of escapism - it's true. As Terry Prattchett wrote, 'This is the fate of each sourcerer - this world becomes too small and fragile for them, and they create their own, and go there'. It helps a lot to move on and it brings joy.

And about comics - let's say you need to be really good at writing scripts, loglines and draw like a printer to make it easy and interesting. It is hell of work and it is much harder to fix something already 'writen'. And you have to use lot of symbols, poses and other things - actually visual language - to tell the story.
Also I would like to try it with my illustrator - 12-14 pages story with no words at all. I'll share the experience if we do it.
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Yeah, you have a pretty nice gallery.

I know wattpad. I've read there some story's but I didn't like it at all. There's a lot of very short, bad and unfinished stuff. Fanfiction.net has the better content.
From a readers perspective, I'm not interested in trends. And I wouldn't write something without having interest in the subject. Not for free.

Fanfiction.net?
One more place for me to have another try, thanks for sharing)

Meanwhile I'm reading 1-st part and already have some thoughts to share.

First of all - design and formatting. PDF looks like a solid document that have been through tons of corporate standartizations and policies. This strange and mezmerizing thing you did with fonts and free space... each chapter takes one page and for some reason I feel it oddly satisfying.
It feels like semi-official document, report or protocol and it feels like you read something from the world of corporations.

Secondary - style of illustrations. That black siluettes fit perfectly. As well as small pictures of hi-tech stuff like combat helmet with sensors - this is minimalistic and gives just right dose of information to reader's imagination. I can add missing details just from my head and it makes story more interactive and more alive.

Sometimes I see some misspelled or missed words - may I suggest you to check the text in https://www.grammarly.com - this small tool can notice the things missed by MS Word (especially misspelled things, since it tries to see context).
But the rest is fine - you use simple and common words most of the time and I can imagine what is going on.
Sometimes you use german words which I understand (rucksack instead of backpack) because in Russian language we use a lot of german words, and it adds some charm to the text. Keep it :)

I have some more thoughts on the structure and the way you tell the story, but let me finish the reading first, to see the bigger picture. And let me know if you are cool to see advices or doubts on this part. I can send it separately in private message if you'd like to.

First, thank you for reading! 👍🏻

I'm glad you like the style of the PDF's. It is a lot of work to format it right. That's not just a formated word document. It should look cool and also readable. Most of the time I write it down directly in the layout program.
I also do some extra stuff like the pictures in there. That's also a reason why I chose the PDF's. I know, it maybe not that comfortable to read it on a smartphone, but making it interactive takes too much effort.
Yeah, I put some German words in on purpose as an stylistic element. Maybe that force some interaction 😁

I tried out grammerly on the first PDF to test it. It has found some errors. Most of the time I had used Tanguage Tool and a dictionary. Seems like Language Tool doesn't find all errors or their just behind the play wall.

If you have some advices for me, just let me know here or via PM.

First file done))

You know how to make tension and feel of danger. This is really good work and I am downloading the next file right now.
Such a good minimalistic style.

I got a little bit lost between the part when the first door exploded and they found two wehicles and the other parts where they were under the rain again, but maybe it is my fault - I red a page per day. And today I finished it.

I wanted to say that it is not really good to make briefing repeated on the way to Read Leaf by the dialogues of the squad. I see your target here - to start with the action, just kick the reader in the middle of the storm along with the squad. And it attracts, it bring my attention, it makes me feel interested in action. There is no place for calm briefing, and I need to know the team...

you already did a great job to make it as live as possible. Maybe it could be better to come back to the first scene after a year or something and make it in a new style, which you'll develop in the end. To make things consistant.
Understand me correctly, the next parts has no bla-bla-bla in radio, team use short sentences and speak how trained team should speak. But before landing it might be better to put briefing part as main character comments, but not dialogues.

Instead 'had you been sleeping whole briefing, let me repeat you everything' it might be checking status with inner comments. Like "two minutes before landing. 'check your ammo' I said to the squad - this mission is not the standard one and we have to bring tranquulizators along with combat rifles - as per the briefing, red leaf ressurected and enhanced dinosaurs blablabla"

Once again, this is the only thing so far that makes your writing weaker, and you already got rid of it once the squad entered perimeter.
It is always better to make first pages as strong as you can to catch attention. Especially when the rest of the story is amazing.

Yeah, you totally right here. My first intent was to write it from a first-person-real-time perspective. It gives you a lot of immersion, and I want to let the reader know, you dealing with professionals, not this kind of 80`s B-Movie Action heroes and I think everyone with a bit of knowledge may feel it or remember it from its own time in service. BUT I gave it up later. Simply, I noticed "oh boy that's way too complicated for your language skills", stretches the story too much (all the conversations you mentioned), and without a narrator, you cant describe a lot of details. You have to change it. In the following parts, I changed the narrator style to get faster to the point and time travel forward. I don't know how this will be received. It's already an experiment and my first story at all and also in a foreign language. In any way, it's good exercise. I'm curious what you think of the other parts. Thank you for reading! 👍

And thank you the most for sharing

Okay yes, I want to read this! \o3o/

Gunna fav it so I can read it later!

Thanks! That's nice 🙂

Love the illustration, nice work and the writing is pretty good.

Thank you 🙂

I just finished reading the first chapter, I hadn't done it before because I was busy with family and work issues.
I read every part, it's interesting how the universe where the events take place and the corporations that compose it are structured.

Sorry for not reading it at the time. It's a good story.

I'm glad to see at least a few people enjoy it.

It's a good story, you handle suspense well in the narrative.