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So here's the original
https://www.furaffinity.net/view/7111231
Im really happy with the glow up on this page too. this whole rain scene has really gone better than I expected in the remake. I asked my patreons if I should leave the words out on the last panel because i wasnt sure if adding them would add or subtract from the comic page and they pretty much voted to leave the words off and I think they were right. If feels waay more dramatic here than in the old page.
The next three pages can already be seen over on my patreon https://www.patreon.com/squiggle for only $1
So here's the original
https://www.furaffinity.net/view/7111231
Im really happy with the glow up on this page too. this whole rain scene has really gone better than I expected in the remake. I asked my patreons if I should leave the words out on the last panel because i wasnt sure if adding them would add or subtract from the comic page and they pretty much voted to leave the words off and I think they were right. If feels waay more dramatic here than in the old page.
The next three pages can already be seen over on my patreon https://www.patreon.com/squiggle for only $1
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I agree with leaving the words off. With comics, dialogue and art go hand in hand for telling a story. They support each other. But you have times where you can let the art speak for itself, and it can actually add more to the piece because of that.
I really enjoy writing out comics that have a good presentation and flow that don't need dialogue. Its something that's fun to me
Good job with the revamp and how it's all comin' along ~
I really enjoy writing out comics that have a good presentation and flow that don't need dialogue. Its something that's fun to me
Good job with the revamp and how it's all comin' along ~
Ya know, when I read this scene the first time with the original, I felt that Gem was just not giving things a chance and poor Paul.
Now, I still think that Gem is being guarded. But also that Paul is also maybe pushing a bit hard. The fact that she and him kissed was massive for her! So was the going out to lunch! You can't expect someone to rush through this kinda recovery process.
Neither of them are wrong. Just mistakes made. And fair ones too, even if not prime.
So nice writing here in showing that.
Now, I still think that Gem is being guarded. But also that Paul is also maybe pushing a bit hard. The fact that she and him kissed was massive for her! So was the going out to lunch! You can't expect someone to rush through this kinda recovery process.
Neither of them are wrong. Just mistakes made. And fair ones too, even if not prime.
So nice writing here in showing that.
You and your patrons were right not to add words to the last panel. Much like not seeing the monster in a horror movie adds to the scariness because your imagination does all the work, so to does not having dialogue in a moment of reflection give the panel a lot more weight and drama than it would otherwise, because we can imagine what's going through Paul's head and it's always going to be better than what the author puts in the work.
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