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Holy moly this page is lengthy and wordy >w<
The most challenging part of this page wasn't it's length though, it was... the flow of dialogue. I actually spent 7 hours one night trying to perfect one line. I actually sent the script to a friend of mine because I was paranoid it might be terrible after I'd decided it was "done" but the only note she sent me was that Josiah used one word that seemed too big for his vocabulary lol - needless to say I was relieved
But hey, we're nearing the end and I'm very proud of how far Abbie has come. I was hesitant to make the silly "ice cream ending" to this page but, after so many months of drawing a generally upset and uncomfortable chicken, it was really nice to draw her cute and happ c:
Holy moly this page is lengthy and wordy >w<
The most challenging part of this page wasn't it's length though, it was... the flow of dialogue. I actually spent 7 hours one night trying to perfect one line. I actually sent the script to a friend of mine because I was paranoid it might be terrible after I'd decided it was "done" but the only note she sent me was that Josiah used one word that seemed too big for his vocabulary lol - needless to say I was relieved
But hey, we're nearing the end and I'm very proud of how far Abbie has come. I was hesitant to make the silly "ice cream ending" to this page but, after so many months of drawing a generally upset and uncomfortable chicken, it was really nice to draw her cute and happ c:
Category Artwork (Digital) / Comics
Species Chicken
Size 980 x 4240px
File Size 802.7 kB
It's VERY hard to turn down ice cream. Though I probably would, with mint chocolate chip...I just don't like chocolate chips in ice cream, they get all hard with the cold. And I'm not big on mint, either, but to each their own!
Wordy but good! The beginnings of a potential friendship after a terrible...let's call it, a misunderstanding! I think the effort paid off.
Wordy but good! The beginnings of a potential friendship after a terrible...let's call it, a misunderstanding! I think the effort paid off.
So wholesome! I hope this isn't the last page... also I kinda like them wordy, the way you have them emote is enough to give a panel ooomph so word away
Also I just realized that the deer boi wears no pants and has no dick but his wolf bf wears pants and has visible bulge and I cant stop noticing
Also I just realized that the deer boi wears no pants and has no dick but his wolf bf wears pants and has visible bulge and I cant stop noticing
If there's anything better than vore, it is this page!
PS. I knew already this was what I want to comment you, and reading the description how much trouble this page gave you, it makes me to add this; You made this comic so GOOD I would be in the same love with it without vore! Characters are lovely, feels naturally real, and this nice forming friendship all together are priceless!
Super very well done! Huge claps!
PS. I knew already this was what I want to comment you, and reading the description how much trouble this page gave you, it makes me to add this; You made this comic so GOOD I would be in the same love with it without vore! Characters are lovely, feels naturally real, and this nice forming friendship all together are priceless!
Super very well done! Huge claps!
Honestly, I appreciate the ice-cream being that little bit extra that convinced her to stay for a bit. It's a good note as that 'extra' gesture, one they didn't have to offer after the apologies and offer to help elsewhere. Also Abbie is adorable, and I'm glad this seems like the start of a real solid friendship.
I think you knocked it out of the park with the dialogue. Certain lines really pop. “Everybody loves pokin’ fun at the dumb, funny chicken.” Using “fun/funny” in quick succession emphasizes how deeply Abbie has internalized that she is worthless or just a joke. She’s reinforcing what the bullies have said without them even there. Dividing “That’d be sweet of ya,” and “But I’m not worth the trouble,” into two separate speech bubbles in a single panel, instead of one speech bubble with an ellipsis also really works. The first part of the panel is Abbie hopeful. The second is her coming down from that momentary high and reminding herself she’s worthless. It’s a single panel, but two very distinct emotions. Then the next panel with Josiah, speaking in a single speech bubble: he’s unsure of his words, but it’s a single thought. He’s not wavering that he wants to help her, he just doesn’t know how to say it. Her finally saying how she should get into bed and the nervous chuckle shows she thinks she's somehow being a burden to them. She obviously wants to stay with them, but she just thinks she doesn't deserve it. She's not afraid they'll eat her again, she's worried the "dumb, funny chicken" doesn't deserve the company.
OK, I could go on, but I think I overanalyzed this page enough. I’m just curious of one thing: are they wearing pants that matches their fur, or are they walking around bottomless? I know Abbie is only wearing the sweatshirt, but I can’t quite tell on the other two.
OK, I could go on, but I think I overanalyzed this page enough. I’m just curious of one thing: are they wearing pants that matches their fur, or are they walking around bottomless? I know Abbie is only wearing the sweatshirt, but I can’t quite tell on the other two.
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