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Derek climbed through the vents leading to the robotisizer. So far no one heard the stealthy panther as he made his way through the complex. He was here for a specific reason and had to make sure no one was aware of him before he could carry out his plan. Looking over the room that housed the robotisizer he noticed that the room was lightly guarded. No more than two Swat-bots patrolled the area.
"Perfect," Derek thought as he undid the vent covering that would allow him access to the room. Silently he moved the covering and waiting until one of the Swat-bots went directly under him. Unsheathing his sword he dropped onto the unsuspecting bot and ran his blade straight through its head. A shower of sparks erupted from the bots head but Derek was already off of it and in front of the the second bot. Before it could say anything about an intruder, its chest plate was slashed deeply enough to sever its power core from its main processor shutting it down. Silence was all that was left.
Derek did not spend time looking over his handiwork. He knew he had only a short time before more bots would come into the room and discover him. He went to a terminal and began inputting code into the robotisizer. He was nearly finished when a coughing fit caused him to stagger. It sounded like a cough that one has when they have a very bad cold. Derek knew otherwise however and that's why he was here. His disease was incurable and it was terminal however he did have options and this was the one he chose.
He had put on this outfit of a coat, boots and briefs for just this occasion. He usually wore this anyway so it was no big deal but this time it had a purpose. He reflected on the beginning of this morning when he had hatched his plot to do what he felt he had to and so regaining his composure he finished the programming of the robotisizer and faced his destiny.
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Derek climbed through the vents leading to the robotisizer. So far no one heard the stealthy panther as he made his way through the complex. He was here for a specific reason and had to make sure no one was aware of him before he could carry out his plan. Looking over the room that housed the robotisizer he noticed that the room was lightly guarded. No more than two Swat-bots patrolled the area.
"Perfect," Derek thought as he undid the vent covering that would allow him access to the room. Silently he moved the covering and waiting until one of the Swat-bots went directly under him. Unsheathing his sword he dropped onto the unsuspecting bot and ran his blade straight through its head. A shower of sparks erupted from the bots head but Derek was already off of it and in front of the the second bot. Before it could say anything about an intruder, its chest plate was slashed deeply enough to sever its power core from its main processor shutting it down. Silence was all that was left.
Derek did not spend time looking over his handiwork. He knew he had only a short time before more bots would come into the room and discover him. He went to a terminal and began inputting code into the robotisizer. He was nearly finished when a coughing fit caused him to stagger. It sounded like a cough that one has when they have a very bad cold. Derek knew otherwise however and that's why he was here. His disease was incurable and it was terminal however he did have options and this was the one he chose.
He had put on this outfit of a coat, boots and briefs for just this occasion. He usually wore this anyway so it was no big deal but this time it had a purpose. He reflected on the beginning of this morning when he had hatched his plot to do what he felt he had to and so regaining his composure he finished the programming of the robotisizer and faced his destiny.
Category All / Transformation
Species Panther
Size 978 x 1280px
File Size 153.4 kB
Nice rough draft and I like where you are going with it. Just in my opinion you might want to find other words for "robotisizer" as reading unfamiliar words like titles makes the brain pause, even if for only part of a second, and that disrupts the feel of the read. After nameing it once try words like (random example here: the machine, or the device, which also gives the added bonus of using adjectives and describing words).
Other then that the writing is a little spuratic, like the last paragraph doesn't necessarily fit.
The most important thing though is that it's interesting, which it very much is, and I can't wait to read more ^^
*is now a new watcher*
Other then that the writing is a little spuratic, like the last paragraph doesn't necessarily fit.
The most important thing though is that it's interesting, which it very much is, and I can't wait to read more ^^
*is now a new watcher*
Well that's different :) Most of the time it's one breaking into a lab to save another... I don't think I've seen anything where one breaks into a lab in order to purposely get themselves modified... for whatever reason. Nice snip, I like it! Are you going to do a sequence with him?
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