aww, that sucks about the laptop. anyway, i like ur writing style, i don't mind if the paragraphs are long, some books are like that. and, yes, your words do paint a picture, me likey ^^

Your writing style is fine, in my opinion. I've never really noticed a difference between stories.

I like reading stuff on the page, but as long as I can at least read it in WordPad I'm happy. :3

If you're ever worried about length post it in installations or chapters x3

Oh, and as far as style goes, I enjoy the variety you use. :3 First person for example, is an interesting read.

sounds good yer work is fine

It doesn't bother me at all, just keep up the good work with your stories, they certainly don't come short on originality!

your writing is asomsauce ^_^ and you not so bad yourself

I've always liked your stories. As long as there's farting,skunk spray, watersports, scat or a combo of the above ^_^

DIRTY! :o

Your formatting never jars me or takes me out of the story. You draw me in well with your verbiage, and make my pants feel tight. <3

And I'm looking forward to the epic story <3

I'm a bit dyslexic, so no matter the writing style you use, My mind takes a paragraph and rearranges it so I can understand it.

That's not to say there's some writing styles that I can't stand, but you've never breached or even approached or so much as looked in that points direction.

Okay, to start off, Jizzal. "Most" artists and writers are not happy with their work. They know the flaws and they know that it's not perfect. Yes I have noticed your change in say, view I guess, is it in 1st person, 3rd, sometimes you seem to have both jumbled in a story. But, then again this is whats coming from within you, you see a story in your head and you put it on paper...err...notepad. Me, I have no problem with it, you hardly ever have mistakes and you always seem to make a very vivid picture in my head. Besides, even "I" think I could look back on something and go, "Hmmm, maybe I should have added more, or there's some detail I think I want to add into this past story. Look, it's just called editing. Things 'will' get lost but all you can hope is who reads it enjoys it. And honestly I'm pretty sure that they do, including me. But you just got to move on, if you took forever trying to make a single thing perfect, it would never get done, you'd become bored with it, and you'd never get to work on anything else. Nothing will every be completely perfect. So just cheer up skunkie, I promise you'll find it in yourself to smile at something you make.

Say for instance this novel. I for one am very interested, and won't want to miss out! :D

Hmm I haven't had a chance to read any of your more recent stories...they are still looking at me in my submissions list! I haven't ever seen any issues with how you write before though, it seems just fine to me. You're probably just going through what most writers(even me) go though, that being never being satisfied with your own work. You can always go back and add little things here and there, but you will probably never feel satisfied. It's a sign you care about your work.

And a novel hmm? Sounds neat. I wonder if my 76 or something page RP I did with someone that's being story converted would count as a novel? XD

Nothing wrong with MS Paint icons by the way, I made this story icon in MS paint:
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/1481381/

Oh I've never been happy with my stories, and I doubt I ever will x3
As for the novel thing, my longest story, Devon's Gift is 40+ pages in MSN word and barely 17,000 words x3 for the contest 50,000 words must be typed in on month.

*hugs*

Looking forward to seeing you again soon... *cuddle

well your writing is... well... AWESOME!

and im looking forward to the future stories, ive liked everyone thats come so far since ive been watching

Well, I personally think that your stories are excellent no matter how you write them. Then again, I may be a little biased about it to cuz you're one of my bestest friends. Also, I can't wait to truly chat with you again. And maybe rp a little. And if you want, I can help you out with the thumbnails. I'm not bad at Paint myself.

Yay novel! In one month no less!

Though, coming from a man that once wrote 80 pages in two days: Don't write 80 pages in two days. It hurts. A lot. It hurt me so much I've started using the phrase 'a lot' instead of more descriptive units of measurement. So I suggest starting early in November, as in November 1st, or preferably October 25th. Trust me, it's close enough to count...

If I started in October it would violate the deadline of the National Novel Writing Month, or whatever it's called. One month, 50k words. Oh, and one sore ass from all the sitting I'm going to be doing no doubt.

Oh, it's a contest/competition/challenge thing? Well that's a completely different matter then. It's always fine to hurt yourself if somebody else challenges you to do it. ^^

Your writing style is excellent Jizzal. The PoV changes and new elements are added on occasion but overall it's you.

And you're writing a novel? =O Awesome!

As others have said, no writer is happy with their work, and if they are that's a good indication that they could do something more with it. That being said...

I personally find your writing style quite refreshing, in that you often choose to develop characters through dialog rather than through description or providing a glimpse into their minds, which really works well for your stories and is definitely effective, and your length of paragraphs is consistent with this style (Devon's Gift being a good example of this). Word choice is a personal thing, so I don't really have much to comment about that; I don't see a problem but if you want to have more variety in your vocabulary or something, then consult a thesaurus. My rule of thumb is to not use the same word in the same context in the same or even consecutive sentences, if at all possible. However, that's just a personal gauge that I use and certainly one can be a successful writer with different rules, if any at all.

So, don't worry about it, just keep doing what you're doing and we'll keep on enjoying it <3.

Do you think my writing style, as in format, organization ect. is acceptable?

Short answer: Yes.

Your stories always read very smoothly. If you're making any mistakes, they're drowned out by the content of what you're writing. Either way, you're doing something right.

I know I tend to switch it randomly from story to story, though I do know I don't bother indent. Is that a problem?

Again, I never noticed. Indentation is more important when you don't double-space between paragraphs. I've never noticed you having any wall-of-text issues.

What about word choice? Am I using words that help paint a picture or am I merely splashing paint all over a mental canvas?

Your stories are generally pretty evocative. I remember, in particular, being wowed by The Last Dance. I still think about that one quite a bit. ;)

Writing a story is kind of like casting a magic spell. Words have power in their connotations, and if you mix them correctly, formidable sentences rise from them. Adjectives are fine, but if you really want to light up the reader's brain, describe with metaphors and similes.

Word choice comes with practice and experience. There will always be a better way to write something. Do strive to improve, but don't beat yourself up over it.

Remember, above all, that you're telling a story, not writing a news article. Just let your own voice come through.

Does it become a bother or a hassle o read over my poorly constructed paragraphs that contain anywhere from 1-20 sentences?

The next time you watch something on television, preferably a work of live action fiction, pay attention to how often the camera changes viewpoints. Some shots are quick, others linger. It depends on all sorts of variables -- how the scene is being paced, how much emphasis the director wanted to put on a particular image, etc. And it's kind of the same way with paragraphing. It's sort of a cue to the mind's eye that we're moving. Long paragraphs are like floating down a river.

Short paragraphs are like shooting the rapids.

Each can be effective. You can usually trust your intuition on that one. ;)

In other news, week 3 of my laptop not being here begins...which blows, cause even though it's easier to write without IMing folk, I still miss the company of you kind people. I still hang around the Black Labyrinth and YumChat when I can, hopefully see some of you there!

Yeeeah, I need to get back to the Labyrinth. Just haven't been feeling especially in character lately. c.c

Also I'm going to be writing a novel during the month of the November. And when I say I'm -going- to, it means I'm -going to-. 50,000 words of erotic smut. How bitchin' is that?

Quite bitchin'! :D Yay, I got you started! Now I pretty much have to do it this year!

Edit- ALSO! I'm aware of how crappy my icons for stoies <.<; I make them in MSPaint. I'm thinking about adding stuff like species to the list of things, though I need a better way to make those damn icons so they don't look so bad D:

Hmmmm, I don't know much about the thumbnail system around here, but as a shot in the dark:

A) Are you saving them in a lossless format like .gif or .png? Not .jpg?

B) Did you go to "Image - Attributes..." in Paint and set it to the correct width and height before entering the text?

If those don't help, then I'm out of ideas. ;)

*Reads through aboput half the comments, then gets lazy and skips right to posting his own comment*

So, to start off, I'll be blunt. I fucking love your stories. Hell, if it weren't for them being as well-written as they are, you and me would never have met. I tried many times to get ahold of artists who I love, but usually to no avail.

ANYWHO.

Your style of writing certainly does paint a mental picture in my mind, and I can see the events unfold in my head as i read, which is a rare thing for me in stories. I on't deny the fact that there have been a couple times where I had to re-read a section to better understand what was going on, but other than that they've been spot-on.

As for the contest novel thing, I am VERY excited to read this, and will attempt to read in one sitting, though i doubt that'll happen, with my schedule for work being so nutso as it is.

But it shall be read. Oh yes, it shall be read ;)

Lemme preface this with this: Your. Stories. Pwn. D:

I dig the hell out of them, even if they weren't well written. Yet, they are. Which makes them even more awesome! I'm, honestly, very jones'd about your novel, and intend on printing it out and reading it at work. I like your icons. They're informative. o.O That's all an icon needs for a story.

I love your writing style, my skunk friend. :3

Oh man, a novel? That's gonna be nuts dude, good luck to you!

Along with Anima's, yours are the only stories I really read :3

I really like your writing style Jizzal, and it seems fine to me. Hope you have fun on that novel you're writing, and I hope you get your laptop back soon enough. ^^ Take care of yourself skunky.

To reiterate - you write splendidly. Hell, you write period, which is a fuck of a lot more than I can say for myself. Don't sweat the details sweetie; just keep doin' what your doin'. Clearly no one else seems to mind either. What, novel? You're gonna write a 50,000 word stroke book for some contest? Now that's ambition! Startin' to feel a little proud here <3

I love your writing style big bro! It's always a pleasure to read.
Good luck with your novel! I'll probably not do much writing, I never do
I miss you T_T I hope you get back to ims soon.
On the topic of your icons, I think they're perfectly fine, simple and to the point.