I've actually got two sequels mulling over to that story in mind, I just lack the time to write them what with commissions and all. Maybe for the one year anniversary or something.

First story I'd give an 85 it some of the best I've seen
Twinkle twinkle is a 92 you have gotten better but your writing has always been great

Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoy my stories. If you could give some specific reasons to support your ratings, I'd be grateful ^^.

Since exams are coming up I don't have a normalized time where I can sit down and show you exactly where, but a general piece of advice I can give you is that, although your descriptions and imagery and by themselves vivid, your stories have awkward descriptive portions where it would lend itself to either condense the descriptions or place them elsewhere relative to the center of consciousness of the story. Another way of saying it would be that even though the main character is picked up and handled by slim, metallic arms that protrude from both walls and the ceiling at various angles and with various machinery attached to the ends as "hands," the center of consciousness (or "main character") of the story likely doesn't notice them and, in those moments of action, the descriptive adjectives and imagery feel out of place.

Again, that's...general and hardly prevalent in your writing, but it's something you could keep in mind moving forward to make your writing feel more natural to the reader. I do enjoy your writing regardless; like I said, your descriptions and imagery are strong evocative if not always emphatically appropriate. Keep up the good work~

Thanks for the comment! That's exactly the sort of feedback I was looking for. That certainly makes sense, and it's something I've been concerned about for a long time. If you could, by chance, show me an example of where this occurs and how I could fix it, that would be awesome ^^

You are one of the best writers I've seen on FA.

Thanks! If you had a favorite story, I'd be happy to hear it :3 Also, anything in particular you like about my work?

Two Weeks is probably my favorite of your stories off the top of my head. It's hard to say exactly what one likes best about a body of writing, but I think probably two of the biggest factors for me are the level of detail (you include things many writers just kind of glaze over) and the fact that your writing seems like it's intended to actually be a piece of prose and not just a showcase for the writer's fetishes (if that makes sense).

THE BEST WRITER I SEEN SO FAR!!

Good to hear ^^ Any other favorites?

toddlergirl her comics are writeing too and i love them

While I haven't read your older stories (Which I will need to!) I can't really give you how much of an improvement that you've made. I'm also a terrible judge when it comes to things. However! I myself believe your work is pretty amazing, I'm quite terrible when it comes to writing and really... putting the reader in the story almost, so that they can imagine basically everything within it. Your stories allow me to do as such so I wouldn't be surprised if you could find a career is writing!

Thanks for the encouragement! That means a lot to me ^^. If you had any favorite stories of mine, I'd love to hear which :3

Seems like a good idea. I imagine that, consciously or not, people are inclined to rate content about a fetish they like more highly. If you can write something compelling without that stuff, you'll have a better idea of your abilities.

I like twinkle twinkle but then again I'm pretty biased lol. I like a lot of your other work too but I sort of agree with the guys above me. If you're happy writing fetish fiction then I think you're a brilliant artist but if you truly wanted to gauge how good your writing was then take the fetish content out and make a vanilla story.

Me personally I'm content being a fetish artist. I've found my niche and it makes me feel good drawing and writing what I do, whether that will always be the case is a different matter.

Tl:dr
You're great but never be complacent and always look for opportunities to improve ( least that's how I look at my art)

Thanks for the feedback! Well, I don't have preconceptions about being an ARRTIISST! *Dramatic pose and clenched fist*. To explain that a bit, I've noticed a trend among new writers that they want to pump as much 'greater meaning' and philosophy into their work as possible, normally to the point that people drown in it and the story stops being entertaining, out of some vague and outdated notion that good writing has to be symbolic and have extreme depth. I don't believe that, not for a second. Writing that is a denser than the walls of Fort Knox and more boring than the Star Wars Christmas special is bad writing, I don't care how much existentialism went into the writing of it. It has to be entertaining or people won't read it. That's what I consider myself first and foremost: an entertainer. My greatest pleasure in writing comes from the people who read my writing, and that's how I gauge my level of skill. I do have ambitions to write non-fetish work at some point, but, for now, this is what people want to read.