
Melissa was a gardener, not a warrior, so she was startled when a Prophet came one spring to tell her she must save the world. Seeds needed planting and sprouts needed tending, and so she ignored him. In summer a Prophetess came with a similar message, but plants needed watering, and so she ignored that too. Then in autumn a child came, and changed the way she looked at the world. With her garden slumbering the winter away, and with her new knowledge of the earth, Melissa gave in to the demands of prophesy and set out for the Labyrinth of Shadows, where she may die, or be driven mad, or perhaps save the earth.
The intro to a story I started writing today. Don't know when I'll finish it. Felt like sharing. Suggestions and comments are welcome.
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The intro to a story I started writing today. Don't know when I'll finish it. Felt like sharing. Suggestions and comments are welcome.
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Category Story / Fantasy
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Size 120 x 104px
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Interesting story concept. I for one would like to see more, should you decide to continue writing this story. I like the way you depict the internal conflict of your characters (or character in this particular case). I didn't find anything that merited comment for in terms of "fixing", so sorry if you were looking for a critique that led to a way to improve your story. In short, nicely done, as per usual for your writing.
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